Indianna,
You are making some excellent progress in your work and a lot of your blog posts appear more or less up to date. A few things for you to consider:
I have added a few comments of some specific posts to highlight things that you either need to change or add to your work. Please clarify with me should anything be unclear.
Overall, your written work is extensive and detailed. You do appear to construct your writing in long sentences and paragraphs when it could be possible to write less and still make the same point. We really want students to try and avoid overusing text in their - I remember I spoke to you before about this on an earlier analysis. Don't be afraid to spread out your text and use images for references. The DPS analysis you completed (NME - Nicki Minaj) is a great example where you have spent a bit more time and the end result is much improved.
You are still a couple of things missing from your blog:
Initial ideas statement
Main task questionnaire and analysis
Rough sketches and draft work (pencil form)
Your Xmas holiday work is to fill all the holes in your research and planning work and to update what is needed. Please do speak to me if you wish to clarify anything.
Some very good work and with some basic improvements to the research and planning, I would estimate that you will be aiming towards a B grade - keep it up!
Carl.
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